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Species: Short-haired siberian cat
Family: Queen:Spot(Deceased)- Cause: Scourge
Butterfly~Twitch~(Deceased)-Cause:Scourge| Only alive sibling: Haze/Mist
Appearance: NorthLight is a short-furred siberian cat with a white underbelly and light grey fur. She is odd-eyed but it really doesn't show with her blue eye. NorthLight was built for bounding in the snow- it wouldn't stick to her coat when she went. Her tail is long, and slightly bushy. It has a dark, grey that fades into a light grey all the way to her back. Northlight has light ivory splotches that are hidden under her coat. Her paws are white, and so is her muzzle and back of head. A small scar is hidden in the fur of her neck, where she took her collar off. Her coat seems to be brown in the sunlight, when it's neatly matted and groomed.
Character: NorthLight is a quick, swift, and agile with the use of her legs. She has mastered land-hunting, fishing, climbing, and even how to kill a cat with a swift bite to it's neck. NorthLight is one of the darkest cats in the clan. She will do whatever her leader says and won't have a problem doing it: Kill, beat, punish. When you get on her nerves, she will beat you up. ( CAPTAIN LEVI FROM ATTACK ON TITANS GIRL VERSION CAT VERSION) You won't see NorthLight around camp. She's usually in her den, which is highly restricted for visitors unless it's an absolute emergency, or gatherings or clan meetings. She is quiet, 2% merciful, and extremely intelligent.
Northstar, called Crystal at the time with her sibling Silvermoon, called Somoa and three other kits, Butterfly, Haze, Twitch, were born from a smart and wise siberian cat kittypet, Spot. She escaped the twolegs on a rainy night, for she knew that once her kits were a moon old they would be tooken away from her. The father was a WhispClan cat, who used to be a Bloodclan cat, Jaywhisker. Before Crystal and Somoa was born, Spot had told Jaywhisker she was having kits. He was outraged and turned his back on his mate and the kits, knowing that he made made a huge mistake and knew he was loyal to WhispClan. Spot found refuge in an abandonded twoleg nest. It halfly had coverage, but here she could gather moss and bedding for her kits. Once that was done, she started to take the kits' collars off. The first ones to open their eyes were Twitch, Haze, Butterfly, and then Somoa and Crystal. Once Spot saw Crystal's eyes, she completely denied the kit. Throwing her to the side, she let the other four kits to nurse. It was a miracle that Crystal survived- when all the kits stopped nursing Spot was open. Crystal crawled over and nursed herself. It was over a day now, and that's when Spot had to move again. The nights were rainy, and she still took Crystal with the four other kits. Twolegs have been searching for the cat and her kits, patroling and patroling. Spot had gotten to a river where Jaywhisker waitied on the other side. He had no choice to swim across and carry the kits while Spot took a shortcut. Jaywhisker ended up dead, drowned, when he got to shore, but the kits had survived. Spot, taking the shortcut, did not feel pity for Jaywhisker. She picked up her kits and decided to raise them in a barn, near the twoleg place. Crystal always got bullied by her other siblings because of her eye. She would hide it in shame, but Somoa always stuck up for her. Spot didn't really care, either- she just wanted to raise her kits. When apprentice-aged, Somoa and Crystal decided to leave without a goodbye to their queen and siblings with a Bloodclan cat they had met in the forest, Ivyclaw. His father was Scourge, and that gave Crystal an oppourtunity to train with the ambitious cat. She heard he could kill 5 cats with a swipe of his paw, and trained with him until they left for their journey.
Butterfly was also a bully to Crystal, but not that much as Twitch. She would tease Crystal, only sometimes, when she was in the mood to. Sometimes she would include her, sometimes she wouldn't Butterfly had a shy personality. She always liked to stay inside and groom herself. She was neat and dainty, and hated when her fur got messy.
Haze was a black eared shecat with white fur and pure green eyes. She loved to play, but bullied Crystal, also, following her big brothers example. Haze always roughhoused, and when she wanted to play with Crystal, Crystal got scared. Sometimes Haze would push around Crystal to do things with Twitch.
"Can I try?" Asked Crystal, her eyes huge at her other siblings. Somoa opened her jaw to nod, but Twitch, a ginger tomkit pushed his sibling away. "No way, you'll mess up the game again Jinx-cat." That was Crystal's nickname, which she extremely hated. Butterfly, a dark brown shekit and Haze, a white kit with a black ear came from behind him and nodded in agreement. Somoa came to Crystal's side. "Listen up, either shut your mouths or scram!" She arched her back and hissed at her siblings. They yowled and giggled, fleeing. Crystal sat down, placing her paws on her head and sighed. Somoa nudged her. "Don't listen to them, Crystal." Spot came over to where the kits were playing. She lay down as Butterfly, Haze and Twitch tried to attack her. "Look, Bloodclan cat!" Twitch yowled, and gnawed Spot's ear. Somoa got up and bounded after her siblings, while Crystal was a good distance away from them. She licked her paws and would glance over to where Spot and the other kits played. Why did Starclan make her like this, she did not know, but did not like it either.
At bedtime, Spot curled up with her kits in an abandonded stall of the horses. Crystal was still outside, staring at the stars. She loved the way they twinkled up there, and the biggest star was like the leader. When it started to rain, she came inside the stall. Spot lashed her tail as Crystal came in. As she curled up near Somoa, Spot's large tail, wacked her right off her small paws. The runt tumbled away, and she knew that she was not welcomed.
"Quicker!" Hissed Scourge as he dodged the deathblow from Crystal. She landed neatly on her paws, jaws parted. Scrouge paced back and forth. Crystal panted, her tail was already bleeding and had broken her left claw. "Scourge, can we take a break? I can't keep up like this- we've been training for hours, and-" Scourge hissed and unsheathed his claws. "Are you weak? Are you tired?!" He snarled. Crystal stared with her eyes wide, ears flattened. Scourge let out a sigh, and turned away. He lashed his tail in apology. "Look, you want to prove your mother and siblings worthy enough, am I right?" Before Crystal nodded, he added, "And this is just your 10th day. We need to keep training.. eh, 10 minute break. Go." Crystal nodded her head and swivled around to see Somoa in her face, eyes widened. The white and grey shecat had a bewildered look. "Who's that?" She asked. Crystal sighed, and brushed past her. "It's your tomcat-friend's father. While you talk to him I thought I might as well do some training with this cat I've heard of so much." Somoa scoffed with a slight blush, and zoomed for her sister. "He's blood-thristy! Ambitious!" She warned. "I know," Meowed Crystal, showing her her sharp and now long claws. "Mother and the others wil like it, right? It's time to prove myself that I'm not just a jinxed-cat. Im a real cat!" She brushed ahead of her. Somoa sighed and went after her. "Why do you believe them?"
"Where are we?" Asked Crystal. Somoa, Ivyclaw and her had just entered a beautiful valley. They could see a beach up ahead, but thought it would be better to explore it first. Ivyclaw unsheathed his claws. "It might be too good to be true," He growled. Somoa playfully pushed him aside. "Relax, mousebrain!" She purred, and bounded ahead. Crystal followed, her tail lashing. Ivyclaw drew behind, and circled the area before following after the two siblings. Somoa skidded to a stop. There was a forest on the left uphill, which the three cats have been really interested in. "Let's check it out!" Crystal mewed. She wanted to be as adventurous as her older sibling, and took her as an example. Starting to bound uphill, Somoa let out a warning screech. "Watch out, Crystal!" Ivyclaw yowled, too. Suddenly, Crystal stopped and arched her back. Two cats came streaking for her, their claws out and eyes wide. One of them, a white shecat tumbled onto Crystal and raked her sides. She yowled, and struggled under the grip of the other cat. "Let me go!" She screeched as the cat started raking her claws down Crystal's face. The other cat was battling with Somoa and Ivyclaw. Ivyclaw had gotten the tomcat slammed down, and he split open his throat. Crystal kicked with her hind-legs, flinging off the shecat. She landed on her paws, neck fur bristling. Ivyclaw let go of the tomcat, and he retreated next to his peer. The cats rounded up on eachother, bristling. "Why are you here? On our territory? OUR territoy!" The tomcat growled, lashing his tail.Ivyclaw almost leaped onto him, but Somoa held him back. "You fox-dunged cats.. you just attack any cat that is on your territory?" Somoa and Crystal yowled in agreement. "Ready when you are, Whitesnow. We'll take these cats out like mice.."
"Wait." Whitesnow moitioned for the tomcat to sit. "We can handle this better, Hazecloud." Whitesnow walked up to the three cats, dipping her head. Hazecloud looked surprised with her kindness, (Crystal would later find out they were on the edge of life) but lashed his tail. "We are sorry for the.. er.. inconvinience. If you would just leave, then that would be great." As Whitesnow waited for an answer, Ivyclaw growled. "Come on, guys, we'll head farther upstream." As he started walking towards the beach, Crystal stopped him. "Wait- why are you.. so bruised?" She meowed at the two cats. Now noticing under their fur were slashes and bruises. A scar ran across Whitesnow's pelt, but what was worse was Hazecloud's. Half of his face was shredded, and both cat's ribs shown. Hazecloud unsheathed his claws. "None of your buissness, get out before your face becomes like mine!" He threatened. "Hazecloud, what are you doing?!" Whitesnow suddenly turned on her clanmate. Crystal didn't want anymore trouble. She turned around and started heading for upstream. Her companions followed, while Whitesnow talked silently to Hazecloud. "Wait!" She yowled. The three cats turned around. "We're leaving, do you have eyes?" Grumbled Ivyclaw. "No, it's not that." Whitesnow and Hazecloud walked up to the cats. "Our clan is.. in a bad time, right now.. and, we can't find much prey, it all scattered from the valley. Elderstar, though, wants us to be independent. He doesn't know that if.. if we don't get help, Valleyclan cats will be extinct." Mewed Whitesnow. "So, what are you saying?" Piped up Somoa. "You could leave right away after, just.. if we told Elderstar we took in prisoners, could you.. maybe help up with the prey?" Ivyclaw spat, unsheathing his claws. "We were'nt born yesterday, mousebrains. Come on, guys. Let's go." Somoa and Ivyclaw started away, and Crystal was about to go with them. She paused and thought that that whole clan was depending on them. If they left, gone. One whole nice clan extinct from cat race. Crystal shook her head and followed her peers. "Wait!" Crystal shouted, and the two cats turned around. "Im not surprised with their mood. What happens if your clan was about to become extinct? We need to help them! Please!"